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Desire Darkness Contest Entry by ~sukaiburu-chan:iconsukaiburu-chan:





What have I done? Did I cause all of this? I looked around at my surroundings. So much destruction...  This must've been caused by someone! Was it me? I can't remember...
     "Excellent," a voice behind me hissed. "You have done well, child."
     "What? Who are you?!" I demanded.
     "Ah, so you do not remember... look by your left foot. Does that jog any memories?" I did as I was told, and gasped at what I saw. No! I thought, did I...? My mind was suddenly flooded with memories, the last one catching my attention.
     "Angela," I hissed at her.
     "Mm, so you remember now... isn't it odd for someone like me to have a name like that? Angela... it reminds me of an angel, which is obvoius that I am not, unless an angel of death counts," She remarked in her tauntingly  beautiful voice.
     "You promised me he'd be okay!" I shouted, interrupting Angela's babbling. "You promised..."
     "The only thing I promised... was his freedom. I never said he'd be safe," Angela corrected. I felt myself slipping away, and blacked out.
     "If you join me, I'll give you anything you desire," Angela said, her voice growing louder as I regained consciousness.
     "I-I'll join..." I turned my head to see who had just spoken.
     "Now child, what is it that you desire?" Angela asked, sounding sympathetic.
     "I can have... anything I want... right?" The girl asked shakily. How is this possible? I asked myself. I'm right here...
     "That is what I said, is it not?" Angela asked her voice sharp.
     "I want... I want you to free my brother!" The other me asked, her purple eyes flashing.
     "I'm afraid," Angela replied, speaking slowly, "I don't know who you're talking about."
     "Yes you do!" The other me shouted. "You took him from me! He's here and I know it!"
     "Oh, you mean... him?" Angela asked as she gestured to a young boy behind her.
     "Alex..." I whispered in unison with the other me. A sudden jolt of pain went through me, and I was unconscious again.
©2008-2009 ~sukaiburu-chan
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Author's Comments

Writing only goes along with this to explain what's going on. This is for :devArttheeria:'s Undead, Darkness and Desire contest. I see this to go more under the 'Desire' catagory, even though I was trying to go for the 'Darkness' catagory. Oh, and in the picture, her eyes are red because when she joined Angela's team, Angela transformed her, which wasn't seen in her memory, and her eyes are red only when she was first transformed and when she's fighting.

Please let me know if I made any errors in the text, I had to rewrite it.

I may continue this story. Do you think I should?

Story and art © Me, a.k.a. sukaiburu-chan a.k.a. Fry.

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:iconartheeria:
*smiles* Very nicely done. would you like this added as a lit piece, or art piece?

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"If you can't be the best, than just be useful. Otherwise, I'll have to kill you."
~Assirra Xorlarrin
:iconsukaiburu-chan:
Thanks. Lit, I spent more time on that. :hug:

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8:01 PM Fry:HE LOOKED LIKE HE HAD UNDERGONE A LOT OF PLASTIC SURGERY
8:01 PM Nanneh: ROFL
8:01 PM Fry: AND KEPT DANCING
8:01 PM Nanneh: |D
8:01 PM Fry: LIKE A STRIPPER

Nanneh says (7:21) PM:
URGH DON`T YOU CAN ANYTHING I SAY YOU AMERICAN WOMAN
:iconbriannachan12:
-Claps.- I lufed it!!!!

By any chance is that the picture you drew when I was over??


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People act a certin way trying to hide all of the pain, but noone really knows what there going though.
:iconsukaiburu-chan:
Thanks!

Yes. Yes it was.

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8:01 PM Fry:HE LOOKED LIKE HE HAD UNDERGONE A LOT OF PLASTIC SURGERY
8:01 PM Nanneh: ROFL
8:01 PM Fry: AND KEPT DANCING
8:01 PM Nanneh: |D
8:01 PM Fry: LIKE A STRIPPER

Nanneh says (7:21) PM:
URGH DON`T YOU CAN ANYTHING I SAY YOU AMERICAN WOMAN
:iconbriannachan12:
Your welcome

Figured...looked like it. ^^

Continue the story!!!!

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People act a certin way trying to hide all of the pain, but noone really knows what there going though.
:iconkelingking2:
What I noticed at first is you should give another space between paragraphs. I'm a fast reader and I can't read fast if I can't tell between paragraphs whether it's a new one or connected to the one before if there's no space between them.

But the story's good. I wish you luck. I'm planning on entering too, but not sure yet. ^^;

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SOMEBODY SAVE MEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
:iconsukaiburu-chan:
Thanks for telling me. I had done that, but I had to re-type it onto dA to get it up. I'ma go fix that now.

Thanks!

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8:01 PM Fry:HE LOOKED LIKE HE HAD UNDERGONE A LOT OF PLASTIC SURGERY
8:01 PM Nanneh: ROFL
8:01 PM Fry: AND KEPT DANCING
8:01 PM Nanneh: |D
8:01 PM Fry: LIKE A STRIPPER

Nanneh says (7:21) PM:
URGH DON`T YOU CAN ANYTHING I SAY YOU AMERICAN WOMAN
:iconkelingking2:
An advice: type everything in Notepad (if your using Windows) and then when you upload it to dA, choose Add File instead of Add Text and upload the Notepad file. It'll not change the paragraph-ing of your prose.

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SOMEBODY SAVE MEEEEEEEEE!!!!!
:iconsukaiburu-chan:
I'll remember that next time. ^^

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8:01 PM Fry:HE LOOKED LIKE HE HAD UNDERGONE A LOT OF PLASTIC SURGERY
8:01 PM Nanneh: ROFL
8:01 PM Fry: AND KEPT DANCING
8:01 PM Nanneh: |D
8:01 PM Fry: LIKE A STRIPPER

Nanneh says (7:21) PM:
URGH DON`T YOU CAN ANYTHING I SAY YOU AMERICAN WOMAN

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